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Topic: GODZALA - The Empire Strikes Rafe
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meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 11:45 AM
  
When i know you've read it i'll remove it. Just let me know when you're all done.IP: Logged |
darkdreamer
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posted October 31, 2008 11:47 AM
Meta,no not subtle.
STrong stuff. But did she enjoy it? Cause honestly, that would be the line for me, that separates that scene from a rape. Did she like to be taken that way?
I couldn`t really read her feelings in your story. IP: Logged |
meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 11:48 AM
Yes. She did. At first she resisted. But she wanted him. It felt good. All of those emotions. He was releasing into her through sex. IP: Logged |
blue moon
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posted October 31, 2008 11:49 AM
Oh, I'm some way behind, I just saw the first bit on the old thread. It's heading a bit in the porn direction.
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PeaceAngel
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posted October 31, 2008 11:50 AM
metaNo not subtle, but not offensive either. But then, my standards aren't the same as others. Some people may take offense to the fact that he's forcing himself into her and she's swooning. I can see that. But knowing where it's coming from - from you - I get it. There's a couple of parts that I really really like - and really resonate with me. But I'll have to dissect. IP: Logged |
meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 11:50 AM
I'm sorry BM!! It wasn't meant to be sexy, it was meant to be scary. Honestly. I wanted to describe the intensity of the jealousy i see in Sean. I truly apologize.. IP: Logged |
PeaceAngel
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posted October 31, 2008 11:51 AM
DD quote:
I couldn`t really read her feelings in your story.
Well, if you take it that meta is the "her/she" character and that with all the history of our conversations, we know how she feels about him (Rafe) then there's only one answer to that.
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darkdreamer
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posted October 31, 2008 11:52 AM
Meta,ooh, okay, then I like it.  But I fear BM is right about that, not just about your story, but about what we have been talking here.
Did we get out of control a little bit? IP: Logged |
meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 11:52 AM
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metaNo not subtle, but not offensive either. But then, my standards aren't the same as others. Some people may take offense to the fact that he's forcing himself into her and she's swooning. I can see that. But knowing where it's coming from - from you - I get it. There's a couple of parts that I really really like - and really resonate with me. But I'll have to dissect.
Thank you PA. Really. It was just scene. I was the narrator. What parts? Do dissect... IP: Logged |
PeaceAngel
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posted October 31, 2008 11:53 AM
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I'm sorry BM!! It wasn't meant to be sexy, it was meant to be scary. Honestly. I wanted to describe the intensity of the jealousy i see in Sean.
I didn't for one second read that as Sean and anyone else. I read that from beginning to end as you and Rafe. Tell me why I did that? How did I get that so mixed up then? I know I'm sick at the moment, but, but.............. IP: Logged |
blue moon
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posted October 31, 2008 11:53 AM
It doesn't offend me personally. IP: Logged |
darkdreamer
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posted October 31, 2008 11:54 AM
I must admit, I am not unfamiliar to such imagery like described in Meta`s narrative.  IP: Logged |
PeaceAngel
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posted October 31, 2008 11:54 AM
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Did we get out of control a little bit?
No - bu11shit. It's creative writing.
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meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 11:54 AM
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Well, if you take it that meta is the "her/she" character and that with all the history of our conversations, we know how she feels about him (Rafe) then there's only one answer to that.
Hmm.. i never really thought about that... but that actually fits. Is that like... my subconscious at work here? lol. Things are spilling out! IP: Logged |
PeaceAngel
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posted October 31, 2008 11:54 AM
If people are offended by it - don't read it - don't comment on it - easy - go to another thread.IP: Logged |
meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 11:55 AM
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Meta,ooh, okay, then I like it. But I fear BM is right about that, not just about your story, but about what we have been talking here.
Did we get out of control a little bit?
I think we forget sometimes that we aren't on someone's patio talking late into the evening. So yes, in terms of where we are, we have been getting out of hand for quite some time now.. IP: Logged |
PeaceAngel
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posted October 31, 2008 11:56 AM
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Hmm.. i never really thought about that... but that actually fits. Is that like... my subconscious at work here? lol. Things are spilling out!
I know! How weird - because that's just, truly, how I read it. All jokes, and all Rafe jokes aside. I don't know why - but I forgot (or something) your intention of writing about Sean and thought you were writing a fantasy about you and Rafe. I had better go and take my medicine. Genuinely. Back in 2 minutes. IP: Logged |
meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 11:57 AM
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I didn't for one second read that as Sean and anyone else. I read that from beginning to end as you and Rafe.Tell me why I did that? How did I get that so mixed up then? I know I'm sick at the moment, but, but..............
PA, are you being serious? You thought i meant Ralph and i? You could see that between us...? IP: Logged |
darkdreamer
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posted October 31, 2008 11:57 AM
PA,thanks, cause I am not offended, but I do not want to offend anyone else. I like that scene. You knew I would do, both of you. ACtually, well, you know there is a scene in "Phantom of the opera" with Julian, that is pretty much like that, only there were no walls involved. IP: Logged |
meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 11:57 AM
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I must admit, I am not unfamiliar to such imagery like described in Meta`s narrative.
I didn't mean to make anyone blush! It was just an image! A strong image i got from thinking about him! ..i'm just going to keep quiet for a while... IP: Logged |
meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 11:59 AM
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I know! How weird - because that's just, truly, how I read it. All jokes, and all Rafe jokes aside. I don't know why - but I forgot (or something) your intention of writing about Sean and thought you were writing a fantasy about you and Rafe.I had better go and take my medicine. Genuinely. Back in 2 minutes.
Wait, you think i would fantasize about that? Like, that i would want that scene to happen? I'm truly curious. IP: Logged |
PeaceAngel
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posted October 31, 2008 12:00 PM
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PA, are you being serious? You thought i meant Ralph and i? You could see that between us...?
Yes, but the only thing that didn't fit - I couldn't work out - was why would you would cheat on him? Because if you had him, you wouldn't do that. That's just what didn't fit for me. But in the name of art, flow with the story, for whatever reason, you did, and on it went. IP: Logged |
meta_4
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posted October 31, 2008 12:01 PM
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PA,thanks, cause I am not offended, but I do not want to offend anyone else. I like that scene. You knew I would do, both of you. ACtually, well, you know there is a scene in "Phantom of the opera" with Julian, that is pretty much like that, only there were no walls involved.
DD, I thought you would see the picture clearly. You would get what i meant. Maybe even caught up in it. I expected that from you. I don't know why... IP: Logged |
PeaceAngel
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posted October 31, 2008 12:01 PM
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Wait, you think i would fantasize about that? Like, that i would want that scene to happen? I'm truly curious.
Parts of it - yes. IP: Logged |
darkdreamer
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posted October 31, 2008 12:01 PM
Don`t get quiet, Meta, I thought it was wonderful. I wanted to read it, and I knew before what you would write (at least approximately).LEt me blush here, I like to blush.
But I think I really need an emergency surgery. Someone has to cut this man out of my mind, or wherever he got stuck.
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