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Topic: First time Lexigrammer looking for feedback on love poem!
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BlackSwan Knowflake Posts: 69 From: Vancouver Registered: May 2020
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posted July 07, 2020 09:42 PM
Hello All! Since I have discovered Linda and this wonderful website I have started to become obsessed with Lexigramming. I know that there are basic principle rules/ some dos and donts, what I am really hoping for is a bit of guidance/feedback when it comes to composing poetry through the magic of Lexigram! I have been working on this poem for this person that I love with a fever. Below are the letters of his full name (first middle and last), I do not want to actually write his name down for privacy reasons. So I just compiled the letters in his name, they are as following: CEEEEHIIKLLNNOPRRSTVW If its easier here they are as vowels/consonants: EEEEIIO / CHKLLNNPRRSTVW Below is a poem I am workin on and all I want to know from you wonderful advanced Lexigram masters, is if I am doing this right? Am I using the correct format? Is there any tips or tricks when composing? can you spot any critical mistakes?? I know there are a couple words that are not spelt correct however I have not added any letters that aren’t in his name, just rearranged the spelling until I can find another correct word to use in its place. Exmaple PHIRE=FIRE since he doesn’t have an F in his name. Anyways I would LOVE to know what your thoughts are...please go easy on me I am a newbie: CEEEEHIIKLLNNOPRRSTVW OH! HOW SHE’LL COVET HIS LOVE! HIS LIPS SWEET LIKE KIWI HIS SKIN TWINKLES LIKE PERIWINKLE IN WINTER NO ONE WILL EVER OVERTHROW HIM ON HER THRONE OF LOVE. SHE HOPES HE KNOWS THIS... IT IS SHE WHO THROWS HIM THE PEN TO NOTE THEIR LOVERS LORE HE RE-WRITES THE SCRIPT OVER N OVER IN HER VIEW, HE IS THE STOIC HERO, LION LIKE, ERECT. ELECTRIC AND RECEPTIVE THO SHE IS INCLINED TO THINK HIM EVIL LIKE HE IS THE INNKEEPER OF HELL SHE, HIS KEEN CLIENT THROWS HIM THREE PENCE PER WEEK IT IS THE TOLL SHE RENTS TO LIVE IN HIS PHIRE HOTEL IT WILL SLOWLY KILL HER, LIKE NICOTINE IN HER VEINS. HOWEVER, SHE KEEPS STILL FOR CENTILLION EONS SHE’LL SEETH IN HIS LOVE HE WILL NEVER EVICT HER. <3 IP: Logged |
BlackSwan Knowflake Posts: 69 From: Vancouver Registered: May 2020
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posted July 07, 2020 09:44 PM
I just noticed Electric has two C's in it!!! DARN hahah first mistakeIP: Logged |
BlackSwan Knowflake Posts: 69 From: Vancouver Registered: May 2020
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posted July 08, 2020 12:07 PM
Also is Lexxigrammer still around these days!? IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 152854 From: I hold a Juris Doctorate (J.D.) and a Legum Magister (LL.M.)! Registered: Apr 2009
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posted July 08, 2020 04:05 PM
She pops in from time to time.IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 152854 From: I hold a Juris Doctorate (J.D.) and a Legum Magister (LL.M.)! Registered: Apr 2009
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posted August 05, 2020 04:54 PM
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ballerina Moderator Posts: 2353 From: A Place on Earth Registered: Feb 2014
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posted August 15, 2020 12:24 PM
Wow! BlackSwan, you're a natural at lexigramming!...
------------------ All my love, with all my Heart lotusheartone/Emeraldopal IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 152854 From: I hold a Juris Doctorate (J.D.) and a Legum Magister (LL.M.)! Registered: Apr 2009
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posted September 17, 2020 01:10 PM
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Randall Webmaster Posts: 152854 From: I hold a Juris Doctorate (J.D.) and a Legum Magister (LL.M.)! Registered: Apr 2009
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posted October 24, 2020 12:41 PM
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Randall Webmaster Posts: 152854 From: I hold a Juris Doctorate (J.D.) and a Legum Magister (LL.M.)! Registered: Apr 2009
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posted August 11, 2021 06:28 PM
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Lexxigramer Moderator Posts: 7074 From: The Etheric Realms...Still out looking for Schrodinger's cat...& LEXIGRAMMING.♥.. is my Passion! Registered: Feb 2012
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posted October 03, 2021 05:59 PM
quote: Originally posted by BlackSwan: Hello All! Since I have discovered Linda and this wonderful website I have started to become obsessed with Lexigramming. I know that there are basic principle rules/ some dos and donts, what I am really hoping for is a bit of guidance/feedback when it comes to composing poetry through the magic of Lexigram! I have been working on this poem for this person that I love with a fever. Below are the letters of his full name (first middle and last), I do not want to actually write his name down for privacy reasons. So I just compiled the letters in his name, they are as following: CEEEEHIIKLLNNOPRRSTVW If its easier here they are as vowels/consonants: EEEEIIO / CHKLLNNPRRSTVW Below is a poem I am workin on and all I want to know from you wonderful advanced Lexigram masters, is if I am doing this right? Am I using the correct format? Is there any tips or tricks when composing? can you spot any critical mistakes?? I know there are a couple words that are not spelt correct however I have not added any letters that aren’t in his name, just rearranged the spelling until I can find another correct word to use in its place. Exmaple PHIRE=FIRE since he doesn’t have an F in his name. Anyways I would LOVE to know what your thoughts are...please go easy on me I am a newbie: CEEEEHIIKLLNNOPRRSTVW OH! HOW SHE’LL COVET HIS LOVE! HIS LIPS SWEET LIKE KIWI HIS SKIN TWINKLES LIKE PERIWINKLE IN WINTER NO ONE WILL EVER OVERTHROW HIM ON HER THRONE OF LOVE. SHE HOPES HE KNOWS THIS... IT IS SHE WHO THROWS HIM THE PEN TO NOTE THEIR LOVERS LORE HE RE-WRITES THE SCRIPT OVER N OVER IN HER VIEW, HE IS THE STOIC HERO, LION LIKE, ERECT. ELECTRIC AND RECEPTIVE THO SHE IS INCLINED TO THINK HIM EVIL LIKE HE IS THE INNKEEPER OF HELL SHE, HIS KEEN CLIENT THROWS HIM THREE PENCE PER WEEK IT IS THE TOLL SHE RENTS TO LIVE IN HIS PHIRE HOTEL IT WILL SLOWLY KILL HER, LIKE NICOTINE IN HER VEINS. HOWEVER, SHE KEEPS STILL FOR CENTILLION EONS SHE’LL SEETH IN HIS LOVE HE WILL NEVER EVICT HER. <3
Will look it over when I get up and go to desk top computer.
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Lexxigramer Moderator Posts: 7074 From: The Etheric Realms...Still out looking for Schrodinger's cat...& LEXIGRAMMING.♥.. is my Passion! Registered: Feb 2012
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posted October 03, 2021 06:05 PM
quote: Originally posted by BlackSwan: Also is Lexxigrammer still around these days!?
Welcome BlackSwan!!!! . Yes I am still here. Been very I'll for da long time, on top of being disabled since 1989, things have become worse, seriously degenerating syndromes etc. Then Covid hit and cancer. Husband in much the same state. Sigh....but yes, am still here and trying to get back to posting more. Hopefully insurance will pay for all my vision and cancer etc. Issues. I will look your long poem over when I can get on the desktop. Please bear with me. Pardon any typos, will fix any when I can see a bit better on bigger screen.
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Lexxigramer Moderator Posts: 7074 From: The Etheric Realms...Still out looking for Schrodinger's cat...& LEXIGRAMMING.♥.. is my Passion! Registered: Feb 2012
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posted October 04, 2021 10:25 PM
Yeah messed up bad have to use magnifying glasses and contacts and reading glasses all at the same time, and still barely see these days.cannot afford to get vision correction devices and 2 surgery too for cataracts etc. Macular degeneration too. Fun. Ugh. So please bear with me. I am doing my best. IP: Logged |
Lexxigramer Moderator Posts: 7074 From: The Etheric Realms...Still out looking for Schrodinger's cat...& LEXIGRAMMING.♥.. is my Passion! Registered: Feb 2012
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posted October 04, 2021 10:34 PM
Not done yet but see that you correctly used a contraction for the phrase "she will", by using "she'll" instead. If you could not spell it out as she will you couldn't use the contraction she'll. Most folks miss that rule when lexagramming.IP: Logged |
Lexxigramer Moderator Posts: 7074 From: The Etheric Realms...Still out looking for Schrodinger's cat...& LEXIGRAMMING.♥.. is my Passion! Registered: Feb 2012
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posted October 04, 2021 10:39 PM
Using fake words and misspellings are invalid for lexagramming. you simply do not try to force the words to show when they are not in all actuality really there to use.IP: Logged |
Lexxigramer Moderator Posts: 7074 From: The Etheric Realms...Still out looking for Schrodinger's cat...& LEXIGRAMMING.♥.. is my Passion! Registered: Feb 2012
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posted October 04, 2021 10:42 PM
Overthrow cannot be used. You have only one copy of the letter o to use. Overthrow has two copies.IP: Logged |
Lexxigramer Moderator Posts: 7074 From: The Etheric Realms...Still out looking for Schrodinger's cat...& LEXIGRAMMING.♥.. is my Passion! Registered: Feb 2012
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posted October 04, 2021 10:52 PM
In lieu of fire....consider such as...... hot shine Hot as Hell's son is he within His love so eerily hotRough examples but you get my drift right? Will ponder more on other words or phrases to use instead of fire. IP: Logged |
Lexxigramer Moderator Posts: 7074 From: The Etheric Realms...Still out looking for Schrodinger's cat...& LEXIGRAMMING.♥.. is my Passion! Registered: Feb 2012
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posted October 04, 2021 10:56 PM
I shall return asap! Please bear with me.IP: Logged |
Randall Webmaster Posts: 152854 From: I hold a Juris Doctorate (J.D.) and a Legum Magister (LL.M.)! Registered: Apr 2009
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posted January 23, 2022 12:51 PM
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